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Kokinshu #171
Wednesday, 30 November 2011 07:03 Topic unknown.
An inside lining --
the fluttering of the hem
of my husband's robe!
How enticing they are,
the first breezes of autumn.
waga seko ga
koromo no suso o
fuki-kaeshi
uramezurashiki
aki no hatsukaze
---L.
An inside lining --
the fluttering of the hem
of my husband's robe!
How enticing they are,
the first breezes of autumn.
—5 November 2011
Original author unknown. Pivot-word: ura = "reverse"/"lining" / uramezurashiki = "enticing"/"creating curiosity" -- I displaced the lining to the start for the rhythm and to bring out more clearly the "reasoning technique" of deducing cause from observed effect, even though this imposes a progression not fully present in the original. The man is not necessarily married to the speaker, but the alternative of "darling" isn't strongly gendered enough. Compare to #25, which may be riffing on this.waga seko ga
koromo no suso o
fuki-kaeshi
uramezurashiki
aki no hatsukaze
---L.