In the “Jade Terrace” Style #7, Quan Deyu

[lnhammer]

M’lord departed in flower season.
It’s flower season—you don’t arrive.
Before the eaves, paired swallows fly.
This fallen one is pining and weeping.

玉台体 之七
君去期花时，
花时君不至。
檐前双燕飞，
落妾相思泪。

The speaker uses a humble first-person pronoun used by women (妾 qiè, which as a noun means concubine) that I usually translate as “this one.” There’s slightly more ‘there’ there than in the previous, but only slightly.

---L.

Comments

[sartorias]

Slight indeed. Line three has a nice image, but the rest I kinda slide off.

[lnhammer]

Yup, that's the good line. Unfortunately, there's a couple more of these in the set.